The orb of the giant moon was disappearing on the cold horizon, soon the icy shadows would fall: they were alone, many parsecs from their kind, on the vast silvery planet.
But for them there would be no rest, their great bodies would continue to work through the long night: they were builders, never to rest, always on alert, till their task was accomplished, then they would die.
One of the two females turned to her companion, admiring the long and strong legs, the formidable mandibles, and she saw the signs of near exhaustion, would they survive another year on the planet?
But the pyramid was almost completed: another block would soon be lifted, with the help of the great machines, and then they would close the secret chamber, where their Mother would rest, for eternity, in the silence of space.
The two great spiders paused, in exalted worship: “Mother, your daughters have accomplished the prophecy.”
Wow, impressive post. Spot on 🙂
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Lovely writing
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You use such beautiful language and imagery in your writing, always impressive!
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Dear Honoré, this is wonderful! Lovely imagery, beautifully told, rounded sentences that are a pleasure to read…and the little insight at the end to the nature of the characters. I always want to see what you’ve dreamed up for these 5 sentence fiction challenges. xo
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Devotion from an entirely different and refreshing perspective, a good read that held my attention!
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I can feel the tension, the urgency throughout. Well put!!
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Oh my, amazing tale told so well!
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Great piece. It didn’t make me like spiders any better, but I still enjoyed it.
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Very good, but I hates me some spiders.
Cheers!
JzB
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Wow. Very interesting and unique!
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That is beautiful and so descriptive and timely as I am reading a sci fi book that has crazy huge spider-type people building monster structures. I like your characters better though, these others destroy everything besides themselves and their own stuff. 🙂
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I love sci-fi, and I could envision the movie version….great stuff
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I’ve got to hear more. Are you going to expand this? It was wonderful.
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I’ve got to hear more. Are you going to expand this? It’s wonderful.There’s so much stuff here, definitely a burgeoning story.
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To bring sentience to such creatures and to make it believable takes skill. I’d love to see a follow-up piece. Nice work.
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Interesting take. Love that it’s the females of the species carrying on here.
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Beautiful take on the prompt!!!
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